I have seen the beach make love to the sea
I have seen the light dance a tango with a stream
I have seen the wind kiss a solitary leaf
I have seen the bee being a devilish thief
I have felt the care of an unseen hand
I have felt God in a grain of sand
I have seen innocence being sold
as the price for a love gone cold
I have seen the power of a single look
I have felt the taste of a delicious book
I have felt the breath of ice
I have heard the sun's silent voice
I have gotten drunk on the wine called life
and been stabbed by its vicious knife
I have felt the world go round as i stood still
many a secret i have seen the universe spill..
Every moment, every second..
I have seen my heap grow
good, bad, old, new..I don't know..
..This is me...and my treasure trove..
PS: I request all those who read it to please include a title of your choice for this poem in the comments urf plashes section..i would love to know what this says to you
take care :)
PPS: by the way, on popular request..i have decided to award an award for the best title(the one that speaks the most to me..) from among all those left behind in the comments section..the result would be announced on the 2nd of January, 2008 in the comments section of this post. The awarded would get something special from my end(i still haven't decided what that would be so..keep guessing :D).
In order to help me judge i request u to kindly include an explanation behind the title yo chose to give this.
thank you people
love and luck
#umang# :)
32 comments:
I have gotten drunk on the wine called life
and been stabbed by its vicious knife
wah!
Title= Buzz-word! :D
I have felt the care of an unseen hand
I have felt God in a grain of sand
I have felt the world go round as i stood still
many a secret i have seen the universe spill..
Title - Tequila with a tinge of Honey
:D
@reeta thanku h jee..and buzz-word..hmmm..wonder what made u think of dat ;) :P
@maverick...aaah i loved d title for more reasons than one
thnxxxxxx :)
Woah!That was excellent!!!Hope you can hear the applause :)
I would have put the last line...
My treasure trove
as the title!
Keep up the great work darling.Merry Christmas to you too my Santa Queenie Bee ;)
ECSTATIC DELIGHT!!;)
@sameera
thanks so much..u r pure honey as always :)
and actually that was exactly what i had thought of using as a title but as i have been doing it with a lot of my poems recently..i decided to refrain from it :D
love hugs and kisses :)
Hmmm...i knew smthin was up here.....
nyways..'my treasure trove' i feel is the best....
or it maybe 'the roundabout of life'
:) in b/w....awesome expression+strong imagery...
tcare
well, i too feel that 'my treasure trove' is the best possible title for this one...
have you improved or wot???
great going gal!!!
this was one of your best...
and thanx a ton for the wishes...
keep writing and glowing!!!
Keep your senses alive and keep writing great stuff. Amazing write.
Aur tune meri line chori ki "I don't have a title for this", grrrrr :P
Title: "Through the eyes of a puppet"
Explanation, well, puppets we are, we all are..
In the hands of life, responsibilities
society, love, lust..
everything
P.S. Wahi copy paste kar diya :P
the wanderlust of feelings
hmmm i can only think of "my treaure trove"
why? just coz it brings abt a whole lotta emotions of ur life together.
another possible title cud be "the carousel of life"...same reason.
nuthin else struck
but beautiful work btw... drew loadsa pictures, very less ppl write like that
loved it:)
How bout "The best poetic composition of the year"
I think this suits best ;)
Those who don't agree with me will get stung by a bee in the next one minute after she logs back in!
thats a wonderful one. Sorry cant come up with a title. This poem needs a special one and i just cant find anything to justify the beauty of it :)
Eyes will see,
no matter what it be.
The moment this eyes wink,
this mind has done lots of think.
Sometimes we do feel with eyes,
surely when we see with heart,
Proof of that
when a six year old make you feel out-smart.
When we fully get sense of this world's art
we neither feel stabbed nor starved.
might be pretty amateurish, but like the poem and thought of trying my hand too :)
yeah title attempt: Blame it on eyes.
Happy New Year Sweetie!Aapke liye do award hain mere yahan :)
http://desiduck.blogspot.com/2007/12/ninth-thoughtful-thought.html
Happy new year Queenie BEEEE....The title well -- my travellogue through experiences!!!
seeing the unseen...
loved it...
@anonymous 1
life is an ecstasy in itself no doubt
thanks..next time please leave your name :)
@neha...thanks a lot..i hope i can keep it up..
and by the way, i don't know about the rest of you..but this is one of my favourite poems(out of the ones i have written of course).. i still can't believe i came up with this while getting jostled in a Haryana Roadways bus... :D
@neha and yes i loved the title "the roundabout of life" it matches quite beautifully with my interpretation of this poem :)
@humble devil..thanks a lot...you too have a devilish urf great year..hope to see some new posts from your end soon
take care :)
@gonecase wil try my best to keep it going
and the title..well yes i can see your point now..we indeed are puppets and life pulls the strings :)
@anonymous 2
sorry but didn't really get the jist behind that title..and i am intrigued..i shall be obliged if you could explain the reason behind your choice :)
and please do leave your name
take care :)
@vandita
thanks a lot...yes when i write i do like to draw with words..it is like the letters are my colours and this is my canvas and all i do is paint with these words..i am happy you could visualize it all
and i really liked the title "the carousal of life" very apt indeed
take care :)
@soup lolzzzzz...
i am totally utterly absolutely flattered :D :D :D
thank you and i am truly tempted to give you the prize for the best title hehe.. :D :D
take care :)
@leena
thanks a lot :)
@chacha
thank u for visiting :)
and what a wonderful attempt :)
take care
#umang#
@sameera
thanks!!
i am truly flattered :)
loads of hugs and kisses
love ya
#umang# :)
@ashu
hey!!!
yeah the queen bee is back
a very happy new year to u too :)
and great title :)
@firewhisky
thanks :)
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